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| BlueSapphire92 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abuseI really like this poem an totally agree with it! I choose to be myself too even though some people don't like it and think it's 'uncool', I don't really care what they say honestly, I just want to be myself :)fortunately there are others who think the same way ;) |
| simpleplan13 2008-05-19 ch 1, | abuseMy first observation is the punctuation. Your other piece was like this too. Have you ever thought of maybe punctuating it correctly? Same with capitilazing. Just a thought. Whereas I am my self and do the things I love alot,... myself...a lot The rhyming is pretty good, it doesn't sound forced, but it's accurate. And I like the whole different road things. The piece makes a very good point and is very relateable. The only thing I might say is if you could maybe do more of a metaphor thing with the road as opposed to so literal? Just a thought. |
| Riding Rocks da World 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abusegood good good good good good good!! |
| DollyMixRockOutLoud 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abuseaw you sweetie! very gd. on the boulevard of broken dreams lol x0x |
| fleur de l'est 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseWhen you think about what people get out of their teenage years at the end of the day, and how far they will go in life, things would perhaps look better. It's like a jigsaw puzzle and no matter how things look now, everything will fall into place eventually. |