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| Don Sullivan 2008-05-10 ch 2,  | abuseNot taking my advice before.. FINISH OLDER WORKS, IT PRACTICALLY CUT OFF MID SENTENCE But wait this causes some inconsistency, unless they were engaged for several years.. And Damion was great and Jesse sucks, this sucks. Not the works themselves, I mean, but I do find it to reduce the quality.. I do hope that a substantial amount of canon that includes Damion can still be produced. |
| BregoBeauty 2008-05-05 ch 2, | abuseYay, new chapter! Aw, I miss Damion already! *sniffle* :-D |
| BregoBeauty 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseInteresting beginning! You should probably do a little bit of back story in the first chapter so that people new to the series can understand the story and so that everyone can get up to speed. I think we both sometimes forget that not everyone else knows who the characters are and what they look like and what's happened. I like tricky prologues so I definately like the prologue, but a slow first chapter with back story is a good next step--just a heads up! :-D |
| Don Sullivan 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseAhh you're getting ahead of yourself and breeding inconsistancy. The script is all well and good (and great =P) but can't you get the other stuff like Falls Apart done before moving on to this? I mean, it all causes me so many questions. These are the questions that plague me: What the hell happened in the last almost-four years? Who the dick is this Jesse guy? What the deuce happened to Kim and Damion? WHAT IN THE NAME OF MONTY PYTHON IS GOING ON? When did Kat become a bitchy slutty thing? Where's my coffee? |