The Hippie Nerd
2008-07-14
ch 1,  | abuseThis is a great short story. Unique and at times a bit hard to understand, but always engaging and very fascinating. Keeping the dialogue to a minimum was a wise choice, giving the entire thing a mysterious and alluring aura. A nice buildup from Pava lying in her room quietly to the voices talking incessantly, to the light turning on and her mother appearing, bringing things back to a more peaceful state. An interesting look into this Pava character while still retaining a sense of mystery. A great read, bravo! |
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