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| S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.G. 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseWow- the last few lines make a strong point. A very eloquent strong point, indeed. A personal preference of mine is a period at the end of lines like those, like it's wrapping the whole point up and delivering the message. I didn't notice the first time I read it, which means no one else most likely will, (and if they do, they won't care), but I thought I'd mention it. All in all, this is very strong and touches the reader. I like how you worded it, and I like the style it's done in. This really makes me want to check out your other work, which is rare these days. Well-done, and kudos to you. |
| MyWorldisBlack 2008-05-01 ch 1, | abuseaw =[ thats sad =[ well written though |
| lookin4nemo 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abuse=(... aw this is so sad...yet slightly addictive...I WANT MORE! great sad piece.. this brings tears to my eyes! |
| Faith Adeline 2008-04-29 ch 1, | abuseI liked it. Again, the emotion was good. The end was, I think, the strongest verse. Very good. Faith |