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Reviews For: All She'll Know

S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.G.
2008-05-05
ch 1,
abuseWow-
the last few lines make a strong point. A very eloquent strong point, indeed.
A personal preference of mine is a period at the end of lines like those, like it's wrapping the whole point up and delivering the message. I didn't notice the first time I read it, which means no one else most likely will, (and if they do, they won't care), but I thought I'd mention it.
All in all, this is very strong and touches the reader. I like how you worded it, and I like the style it's done in. This really makes me want to check out your other work, which is rare these days.
Well-done, and kudos to you.
MyWorldisBlack
2008-05-01
ch 1,
abuseaw =[ thats sad =[ well written though
lookin4nemo
2008-04-30
ch 1,
abuse=(... aw this is so sad...yet slightly addictive...I WANT MORE! great sad piece.. this brings tears to my eyes!
Faith Adeline
2008-04-29
ch 1,
abuseI liked it. Again, the emotion was good. The end was, I think, the strongest verse. Very good.
Faith
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