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| MBaxter 2008-04-30 ch 1,  | abuseI really liked this!! I suppose if one thing really jumped out at me, it's that at the beginning Jo was really worried about being with Emily in public, but later in the story it doesn't come up at all. I suppose it just bugs me a little how stressed over it Jo was, but then she doesn't really give it a second thought once Emily comes over. But other than that, I thought it was really good! Baxter |