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| miscellanea 2008-04-30 ch 1,  | abuseThis was really great: Prepare yourself for a lengthy review... I liked how it was a steady train of thought and I also loved the reference to the ten commandments, that was clever. The cherry blossoms falling on the wet pavement brought up a cool thought in my mind. It's how the cherry blossom is here now, but it will eventually desintigrate. It's shape will still remain, however. Like a mummy... The wrappings will still be there in the shape of the body after the body 'poofs' into the thin air of time... dun dun dun. Haha, I think that's the method they used to make copper Nigerian masks, except the blossom would be wax... it's hard to explain, but you can look it up. It would have been better as a paragraph because it's written in prose, (but you know how I feel about that...) =) fantastic. |