I love it. Just hope you'd continue this one day. :]

wow!

this is amazing, brilliant!

well done!

You should be proud of this story. Yeah, it's a little confusing to someone without any outside knowledge, but I was able to follow it well enough to like it before you added the story notes. The story notes just made things a little clearer!

Anyways... Very good short story.

um, makes no sense. is it finished. good though.

This is a good story, but you need someone to beta it.