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| unheardmelodies 2008-06-15 ch 1,  | abusebeautiful. i can relate |
| Isca 2008-06-06 ch 1, | abuseYou expressed the character's pleading-love in this poem exceptionally well. |
| stained blue 2008-06-02 ch 1, | abusei adored the parts in italics, the references you included added, i think. |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2008-05-17 ch 1, | abusethis is beautifully written. very intelligent. you can tell you put thought into this, which you should do, as opposed to some people that seem to throw together any series of words and stick them up on the internet (I think I do that sometimes!) really interesting allusions- Sapphos, Amazons, all the Shakespearan you intermixed- I looked at some of your poems out of curiousity, is Hamlet a big theme for you? Hamlet's awesome, so. like the way you seemed to mesh the two lines of thoughts together as well, and the ending was clever. overall nice job- thanks for the review, and you're absolutely right. I wrote it such a long time ago it was a surprise to get more feedback on it, haha, but I appreciate it. |
| erthiaalyana 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseThis is a brilliant piece of writing, I especially like the last stanza. :) |
| kelsi bones 2008-05-01 ch 1, | abusefalling in love with straight girls SUCKS. and i'm sensing that that's what's happened here. i'm sorry that you have to go through that. your words for her are amazing though =] k.X |
| she smolders 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abuseThis has to be one of my favourite pieces by you now. I love the reference to Horatio the most - after reading Hamlet I've always felt like I wanted to know more about him. And the ending of the stanza on Romeo and Juliet, "I can be a lioness at your feet/raring for the hunt, the chase/to run with you across fields/then tumble together in the warm grass", is just gorgeous and powerful at the same time. Though the ending was cute with the slight rhyming, I'm not sure that I liked it as much as the rest of the poem. Take care and keep writing. |
| Carousel Chorus 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abuseHoly.. wow. This is absolutely amazing. I know the feeling all too well for my liking. wow. Im speachless. *favs* |
| writes between the lines 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abusethis is very sweet. its much more than just your typical love song/ode. it gives me such a good feeling, warm and sweet. amazing work. |
| creepy kiss on tuesday 2008-04-30 ch 1, | abuseUmm...I may be wrong but I get the impression this is from a girl to a girl right? Haha because the genders were all over the place. I like this though, the allusion is great and it's cute. |