Reviews for The Stars in the Sky

Two Of Spades
2008-05-01
ch 1,

abuseI love the stars. nice poem.

Kinna
2008-05-01
ch 1,

abuseI liked this. I felt happy that there was someone/thing as considerate and caring as the stars. Unless it really is the stars that makes the speaker feel this way.

There was one line though, "To make better" which didn't really make sense grammatically with the line above it. Perhaps "To make it better" would sound better?

While your poem was calming in a way, it was sad too, especially where I read "where they want me" I also thought the lack of punctuation was good, and made the lines that did have the periods stronger in conviction and gave them more power.

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