|Reviews for Lost Love|
| Tomoyuki Tanaka 5/10/08 . chapter 1
Same complains here, though your paragraphing was a little better here. Like I said, dialogues between people should be paragraphed everytime someone else speaks. It's still kinda confusing and hard to read, but other than that shouldn't be a problem.
Oh, and punctuation again. Like the Seven Sins, you might wanna add commas and the like in the right places. You're missing quite a bit here. I think. And their is spelled as there, so you might wanna correct that.
Hope to see the next chapter up soon.