Reviews for A Ridiculing Atrophy

conspiracy slayer
2008-05-26
ch 3,

abuseNicest thing I've read all day.

Something that struck me, though. In the beginning you wrote a lot of information in italics -- a flashback conversation within a conversation. I'm going to reserve judgement as to whether or not I like it for later. Your dialogue is a little cumbersome. Some places it's short, but it could be made even shorter. It'll help your dramatic effect.

I will stick around and comment when you update your next chapter.

HurtMe
2008-05-09
ch 1,

abuseI like this chapter and I would like to see this story progress. Please write more.

Return to Top