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Reviews For: Ain't No Love Without II

SEMMU
2008-05-05
ch 4,
abuseI absolutely love the imagery of the last stanza. You're no rookie, are ya?

Here's the goods, in case you've forgotten.

"But no one ever sells insurance plans
For things ephemeral as love and lust
They’re just fleeting images outside that
Little cubicle time’s circumscribed us"

Definetely worth adding to favorites. When I have time, I'll read every word you've shared on fictionpress. Great job. Write on!
SEMMU
2008-05-05
ch 2,
abuseAnother great write. Awesome job. I love the last two lines and the bits of alliteration.

My favorite:

"it’s such a drag since we’ve seen goats fucking
brazenly beneath King Stephen’s statue"

Write on!
SEMMU
2008-05-05
ch 1,
abuseAwesome! You're talented. Anyways, should there be an "a" in the last line or am I missing something?
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