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simpleplan13 2009-07-26 . chapter 49
I like this. My favorite part in the "folded memories." Such a great description.
recycle rhymes 2009-04-15 . chapter 49
it's really heartfelt. i like how you wrote it at an actual bus stop. i should have thought of that! i like the sentiment.
recycle rhymes 2009-03-23 . chapter 46
how shakespearean. i like it though especially how you used his language in the end.
recycle rhymes 2009-03-23 . chapter 45
i love the imagery and how you recycled some of my ideas and made them your own. it's really interesting how people response to poems. it is stunning, per usual.
simpleplan13 2009-03-17 . chapter 44
"Which made me pause reflexive about life."... I felt like there should either be a comma after pause or that it should be reflexively

Your phrasing and word choices are really great here. They depict the scene well.
simpleplan13 2009-03-17 . chapter 45
I really like the way you describe the dance it's different which makes the whole dance as a metaphor for love not cliched, which is good since a lot of times it is.
simpleplan13 2009-03-16 . chapter 46
I really like the word choices here with multiplicity and reticence. Very powerful words.
THROUGHTHESEEYES 2009-03-12 . chapter 3
This made me laugh...the last 4 lines.
And all us women want is to be totally worshiped! (Tongue in cheek)
THROUGHTHESEEYES 2009-03-12 . chapter 1
So true!
simpleplan13 2009-03-02 . chapter 41
I really like this piece because the simile is really great. I love how you did it throughout the whole piece. It's definitely something I haven't read or thought of before, but it fits so well. Great job.
recycle rhymes 2009-02-01 . chapter 41
i like how you took elements of my poem and incorporated it into yours. the imagery is beautiful. the metaphor is interesting.
simpleplan13 2009-01-25 . chapter 40
I like your word choices... and the title. It's nice.
simpleplan13 2009-01-05 . chapter 36
Interesting piece. A bit confusing, but I liked it.
simpleplan13 2009-01-05 . chapter 38
The capitalization was a bit odd you did lowercase in the beginning and then started all lines with capitals. I did like the piece though, your descriptions were nice.
simpleplan13 2009-01-05 . chapter 39
I like the dance thing in the beginning, it's different. I also like the rhyming, it worked nice.
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