I really liked this story and I'll be sure to re-read when you make the changes if you hvent already
can't wait to start reading the sequel (:

-whew-
I FINISHED it.
You should be happy.
;]
I loved the ending, and now must read Lyrics.
Very, very good.
(=
And it's kinda creepy that her dream was exactly like this..
lol.
Anyways.
I DID it.
And you were amazing.
I loved every second of it.
Thanks!
^_-

Dang you, for getting Shake it stuck in my head!!
*-starts humming and rocking body, granting scary looks from family-*
Anywho..
nice chappie.
If I may, can I guess that Austen and Rhyder are going to get together? That'd be so cool. ;]
I mean, it seems as if that may be what you've been setting up.
Seeing as how Rhyder's very girly sometimes.
[giggling?]
Hahahaha.
(=
One more chapter!
Wow.
Never thought I'd see the day, hmm?

=O
Oh no.. oh no.. oh no..
Keep your cool, Aiden! The kids are safe now.
Yay!
Okay, I'm going to keep this short so I can read the next update.
;]
I love it, in short.

YAY!
*-jumps up and starts squeeling-*
Austen.. he's GAY!
Yayayayayay.
This means everything will be okay with him, Mack, and Aiden!
OMG.
How perfect.
Genious!
Golden!
I never saw it coming.
;]
Aww.
Next chappie.. next review! Here I come.

Yayayayay!!
Aww, the last line was so cute.
^-^
Beautiful.
I loved that chapter, even though it was short.
And, I know that this pole must've been taken a long time ago...
*-bows head in shame-*
-_-
I like the title, lyrics.
I hope you're proud of me.
;]
I'm catching up.
I owe it to ya.
(=

Hahaha.
>.<
I actually burst out laughin when Mack landed on Rhyder.
[which, btw, is an awesome name ;]
Okay, so for this chapter, I only have one piece of advice..
I've been trying to think if the story had ever mentioned Mack's neckalace before. If not, I think it would've been a neat thing to explain and note every once in a while throughout the story before giving it to Max, simply because it seemed rushed in the explanation and a bit out of place. But it was very sweet, and I love the relationships the siblings have with each other.
They better find Aiden, and he better be okay!!
:]
[I'm assuming he is, because there's a sequel.. bad Kayla for not reading for so long.. ]

Ak!
It only gets better and better, and by that I mean worse and worse!!
0_o
Poor, poor Aiden.. [ohmygosh].
Kandy, that **!!
What a PSYCHO! (as aiden realized)
Is she mentally unstable? Like, Bi Polar or something?
Omg..
so, yeah.
I'm going to go onto the next chapter now.
^_-
Amazing writing, as usual, though.
[:

O.o
Oh.. my..?
Eesh.
Well, I'm not sure to be honest if I'm happy about Aiden and Mack, but Aiden sure seems happy and that's a good thing.
I burst out laughing at the part where the the flower sailslady said:
"Well, she can use it for her lip or eyebrow or something,"
Hahahaha.
So funny.
;]
So, someone hit him in the back of the head?!
Now, I must read on!
(=
[ipromised]

Aw...
this capter has to be one of my favorites.
But, if possible, it's made me even MORE confused.
Hm.
Because Austen seems like such an amazing guy, and Mack doens't know what she wants for sure! In the end, either Austen or Aiden will get hurt and that means that Mack will too because she cares for both of them. Oh, jeez.
Lol.
The drama!
[which clings to Mack like lint on a suit?]
Hehe.
I LOVE this story.
Again, on to more chapters!
:]

Wow.
Another nice chappie!!
I have a feeling that Kandy's kid is actually going to turn out to be Aiden's, screwing EVERYTHING up. But you know, I'm praying that I'm wrong. ;]
Again, I love love love your writing style.
Its totally drawn me in.
(=
I can't wait until I finish the story.
More reviews on the way!

*mumbles profanities under her breath about a certain 'rapist Kandy'...*
EXCELLENT chapter. I have a few favorite lines, such as:
"And apparently drama sticks to me like lint on a cheap suit."
[&][&][&]
"And I'm not a girl," I concluded. "Well, I am, anatomically, but you get my point."
I was laughing so hard at those lines.
They're so, so... Mac. =D
Hm.
Interesting... I'm not sure how everything is going to be resolved. Which is so good~ I can't stand predictable. Which is like what I write, but you know. ;]
And on to the next chappie!
(:

OH MY FREAKING GOSH.
I didn't think that Kandy could become even more of a **, but what do you know?
AG!
I hate her.
I hate the fact that she's pregnant.
I really hope that she's just saying that as a way to get him back.
I'm so very sorry that it's taken me so long to get off of my butt and review, but here I am and my goal is to finish your story and start onto 'Lyrics'.
I'm excited.
;]

hey.
I decided to make an account, as I am the person who posted the review.
I'm glad your taking critism, and turning it into a totally positive thing, every writer has to be able to do that.
I don't know much about the publishing world, but I know it takes months and months to fully edit a story, and even years to write one!
I do like your story, and some editing, and plot revison, it'll be fantastic.

keep working at it, and i'd be delighted to re-read it again!!
:)

! I'm so happy with the ending, but at the same time a little sad! I'm so glad there is a sequel!
Sorry it has taken me so long to read and review this but I have been so busy with my own writing and music.

Overall this is a great story, something I always looked forward to reading an update of! About the review that was left about the story being unbelievable, I don't agree. I don't think the story has to be believable. I mean it's fiction, fiction is meant to be fake. Please don't change it just to "make it more believable". If you are going to re-write please post it as a different story.

Great read overall, you are very talented.