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| GRAYTEXT 2008-05-23 ch 3,  | abuseHe who was injured first has the last laugh. Nice, I like it. "Getting the news from Harold is like having a brick tossed through the window with a check tied to it." wonderful analogy! "I just wanted to drop in and given Thomas" given should be give, but otherwise a well written act. |
| GRAYTEXT 2008-05-09 ch 2, | abuseGood chapter. I'm glad that Gina has a reason for disliking Harold. A lot of feminists would agree with him, though. By the way, "That’s where your did is, isn’t it?" I think you mean dig. Anyway, another great job. |
| GRAYTEXT 2008-05-02 ch 1, | abuseGreat work! Your characters are well developed, and the dialogue is well written. My favorite line was "With the weight of the world on your shoulders, you can’t really have a straight spine." I look forward to the rest. |