Hey! This is really cool! I'm writing a story, too, about witchcraft (Secrets of Andover) and it's always fun to read different kinds of stories about what I'm writing about. This is good, and I'm off to read the next chapter! :D

Equilibrium from The Five (again, since the others are MIA) returning your review.

I hear you're grounded. That must suck.

Hm. Not much to say about this chapter that I haven't said already. Try running it through a spellcheck on Word or any other writing program you might have. Also, your summary has quite a few mistakes. Try correcting that too - it gives potential reviewers a better impression.

Crystal's tattoos are interesting, but you should elaborate more on what makes them special. And try to make Crystal a little more believable as a character. She's cool, but a little too perfect, if you know what I mean. She's dangerously close to Mary Sue territory.

Good luck with the writing.

This is Equilibrium from The Five returning the review you gave to In Our Element. (BTW, glad you liked that story - I'm the one who came up with the character Altaer, and I almost agree that he needs a haircut.)

Well, I must say that the "mission" Cris' mom gave her is unusual and unexpected. And the idea of missions as tax payments is interesting. But - no offense meant - your spelling and grammar could use some work.

Keep in touch. If you do, we'll probably do the same. C'ya.