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| Eternity's Rain 2008-05-03 ch 1,  | abuseThis is great! It gives a totally different take on what being an angel is like. People generally expect an angel to be blessed, blissed. But your perspective is way more realistic. Keep writing, keep creating. Your imagination and your way of seeing things is yours to command. Umm.. am I getting a little weird toward the end of that sentence? |
| sacredstorm 2008-05-03 ch 1, | abuseThis is amazing! It's a great, insightful look at and angel. But, I'm not sure if "he could not see though" is suitable. I was abit confused by the line till I read it the second time. Perhaps you should change it to "He didn't see them." Just offering suggestions! Don't throw garbage at me when you see the stupid line I wrote! Hey, that hurt!M...Is that leftover pizza? |