 ColorMyWorld 2009-06-04 . chapter 1Aw, adorable, and Oh the humor. This thing with just dialogue is a great idea for a story. You should write another chapter. |
 Penny 2009-06-02 . chapter 1 I like how they're nameless, like you could just be overhearing the conversation.
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It's pretty adorable! Though I'm not sure it's very safe to go on dates with random people... |
 Kalista Jia 2009-03-22 . chapter 1It is so adorable! I love how those two converse. Gosh that guy is so persistent (which is cute and creepy at the same time) aw, for me, I will just punch him and run away. Probably I will fail which will lead to a worse consequence... hm... cute story~!
Plus they are 2 guys, which makes me squeal! Now go on boys~ |
 JtheChosen1 2009-01-16 . chapter 1very interesting way for writing this! I may do something similar in a one-shot i have planned. Excellent work! |
 sweetdonalbain81507 2008-12-05 . chapter 1This was so adorable! I don't even have words!
I really love how you don't really know anything about either character. It really leaves you room to imagine. And it's sweet how...um...guy being stalked (GBS for short) seems cutely frustrated, like, he never seems to actually be angry. And you totally know that...um...other guy (henceforth known as OG) is growing on him, but it's all up to you. If that makes any sense.
Anyway. Loved it! |
 Carnivale 2008-07-14 . chapter 1Ahahaha! Loveitloveitloveit. I love all-dialogue, but this one, I think, takes the cake.
It's so freaking cute!! It made me laugh like nine times, which is a lot for less than a thousand words.
So yeah. 'Tis wonderful. :D |
 DancingKittyCat 2008-05-17 . chapter 1I found that quite interesting. Sure, it's just dialogue, but it's a great way to create an introduction to a story; all enigmas, unsure of what will happen next, but getting a general jist of the situation. Or, you could just have it as a one-shot. Either way, found it quite amusing and sweet to read, very simplistic. |
 calamity jane 2008-05-03 . chapter 1 LOL...I luv this...awesome job! |
 Lise Meitner 2008-05-03 . chapter 1haha, this is cute! Usually I'm a sucker for the long intros dripping with detailed imagery, but the all-dialogue worked well in this piece, and the creative title is a nice touch.
Also, your proper usage of "your" and "you're" is SO refreshing; you wouldn't believe how many writers on fictionpress can't keep them straight, so I thank you for that. :) |