Reviews for The House Of Dawkins: Legacy Of The Demon Prince

Reviews For: The House Of Dawkins: Legacy Of The Demon Prince

Twenty-Six Colours 2008-06-17 ch 5,	abusesniffle My last Dawkins review until July?! Damn, I gotta make this one count. These first scenes, with Mira and Kyle respectively, are really interesting. I love your introspective bits, because they're never straightforward and they always make me feel kind of blinky and trippy, which is really cool. Your action descriptions, they are rocking as usual, but I think you already know that. This is all so dreamy and foggy, I love it. And the return of the Murderess, because Kyle wasn't having enough fun without her actually materializing in front of him. Hahahaha, they dropped all their weapons. You know what this means...catfight!! Pull her hair, girl! Scratch her with your nails! Aw, the last part of Kyle's time in the pocket universe is really sweet. I hope it makes him feel better about some things. But I don't really understand how all that happened. Did I miss something at the beginning? Psh, probably. singing Saiintt! dances in chair And the KGB! I just took a test on them. Nice guys. AND YAGO! It's like a reunion, aw! Saint?! You were involved in an arson? I'm sorry, will you marry me? Damn, it would appear that he's already taken to that. Maybe. But still, my heart is yours! And yay, an explanation for the first bit. That's some crazy stuff! What a good season finale :B Aw, it's sad that Mira thinks she's a bad person for having private thoughts. I suppose that is a vulnerable age, though. And Soledad! Welcome to the dark side, girl. It's fun over here. I mean, how can you beat Saint and his excellent closing anecdote? You just can't. Great season finale, lots of interesting stuff and a bit of everybody--just what I like! I can't wait for Perfect Day!
Twenty-Six Colours 2008-06-14 ch 4,	abuseAh, finally! I've been waiting a while to properly read and review this! The beginning was good, and it made me kind of sad until he woke up and started freaking out about the woman in his bed. Nice--i think juxtaposition is the word I'm looking for, of sad/scary past bits and the humor that colors this whole story. Haha, and Jack's such a great overprotective big bro. He sometimes reminds me of Kamina from Tengen Toppa Gurren-Lagann, but with more self-restraint and awesome superpowers. This creepy person/voice is done very nicely. I always find the scariest moments to be when you're just looking around and all of a sudden it's "WTF is that thing?!?!" which was how it was for me here. Good fun, I love a bit of mystery and intrigue. WOOT action!! I love your very visual action sequences, they're so much fun. Hahaha, and I love the Laban: "I’m not going to stop until my family’s legacy is--Oh shit..." Ahahaha, Kyle. "Oh shit, Jack's here." That's all very interesting about the golem. I didn't know that, it's pretty cool. Where did you learn about it? Great chapter! I don't know what you were talking about, I thought it was very entertaining, and worth the wait. Luci cracks me up, too :B but YAAY SAINT N BIOHAZARD, a match made in heaven! Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Kotuso 2008-06-04 ch 2,	abuseAnother excellent chapter. Honestly, this is probably one of the best stories I've read on this site so far. I did find this pretty funny: Finally Mira asked, “What are you thinking about?” “-I’m sorry, I don’t feel well, I think I’m going to go back to bed-“ Kal said in a rushed tone, standing up quickly and gathering his things. Heh, Kal seems like my kinda guy.
Twenty-Six Colours 2008-06-01 ch 3,	abuseWell, that was an adventure. I was reading this chapter last night, and was doing that nose to the screen thing at the bit where the alley's on fire, and suddenly the power goes out. I mean, I guess I could have been expecting it, since there was an enormous storm going on outside, but still I was freaked out. Not to mention outraged, because fate had left me with a cliffhanger. But thank God I got power back this morning! I can finally pick up where I left off, and leave you the comments my computer erased the first time: That was some freaky stuff Kyle pulled, when he imitated Jack. I think it's funny how he's totally lost in a completely unfamiliar surrounding, but he has these attitude-filled outbursts that just make me laugh. By the by, is that technique for serious? Because if it is, I might have to look into it (not for myself, obviously). Soledad reminds me of some of my friends, who are the boisterous party-going rule-bending types, and I'm in Mira's situation. But I guess that's only funny until you get taken by a group of frightening Russians. As usual, Zeke still has my heart. But Kyle's glasses! snort “We’re estranged.” You have no idea how much. Wow, that was some good action and villainy, a rollicking good time! It's nice that Kyle and Mira are sort of warming up to each other, though I guess saving her life does make for some good conversation starters, so that definitely helped. Though Team Dawkins is pretty badass, I'm still curious about Saint's boys. What are they up to? How is it all connected? So much fun! Chalk this up as another great chapter :B
Kotuso 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseWell, I'll definitely say that this is one of the best-written and logically progressed chapter I've read in a story on fictionpress. I was impressed that you fit so much content in one chapter when it takes me forever to get around 2,0 words in one of mine. I'm too usually not very interested in stories set in modern-ish times or that deal with typical college student...ness, but this story is an exception. I don't really like how other stories focus entirely on student or teenage 'life' in these types of settings so I'm glad that any student element is simply a quirk that makes up the character instead of being the character. Very good job so far.
Twenty-Six Colours 2008-05-25 ch 2,	abuseYay! First person narration from Kal! I can't agree with him, though. I have a strange love for trains, and I don't know why. I always have, too. But seriously, I really like this. It was a very grabbing chapter-opener, and I'm beginning to get quite attached to your 1st person accounts. Plus, it's Kyle, so it's automatically awesome. Ha, awkward Kyle ogling Helena ;B I like Jack. I don't have much else to add, but he's very endearing. I wouldn't mind having an older sibling if I could have him. "Now that she was aware of what she could potentially be capable of, doing something as simple as going to and fro school seemed completely…Pointless…" The same exact sentiments manifest themselves in the form of Senioritis. Hey, the letter! I like it much better here. Um, I feel I must warn you, I've fallen in love with Zeke. He reminds me a lot of Jack Creston, with his mannerisms and theatric entrance, and...gawd, that's one hot Norwegian. swoons Mm, great chapter, what what! I believe my new favorite character (you know, besides Saint) is Zeke, and I enjoy the little bits of Britishness in the dialogue. This is a very fun ride, so far. Keep up the excellence, mate ;B Cheers!
Twenty-Six Colours 2008-05-04 ch 1,	abuseIt's the end of the day and I'm still the first person to review this? On one hand, I'm excited to have gotten here first. On the other, I'm wondering why more people haven't come on here to tell you this is teh shiz. I'll have to do some shameless plugging around, spread the good word, what what. Well anyway, I should review, and I'll do it English style because I feel the occasion calls for it: What ho, old fruit! Jolly good story you've got here, really smashing! I particularly adore the fact that you've got a character named Jack now as well. I wonder what would happen if we put our Jacks in a room...looks up and to the left Oh God, maybe we shouldn't do that... But I like your initial characterization of him, he seems like an interesting fellow. I also enjoyed the way you painted 2031 London, and I could picture it pretty well. The only thing I would suggest at this point is more of a formatting thing, because I liked the first line "The cameras overlooked the streets of Soho..." so much. I thought it would be really striking if that was the first thing you read in the chapter. I mean, keep the letter, but put it in it's own chapter as a prologue or something, because that opener is too good to be buried in the middle of the page like that. Honestly, other than that you've really snared my interest, mate. I'm itching to see where this goes! Cheers!

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