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Reviews For: Greed

Jessica Wright 2008-06-30 ch 1,	abuseWow. Didn't see that coming.o0 Okay, I'm still having a problem with the background for your stories. Your description is wonderful, as is your dialogue. But I need to know a bit of the history behind characters and places. When did they meet? How did they meet? It's a good story, but it starts in the middle, and doesn't go back to explain it that much.o0 For all of your stories, just a bit more information would be nice. Just to set it up in the reader's mind.
Maziana 2008-06-30 ch 1,	abuseThat was awesome. I like the way it did not mention a real setting, like a state or country. Also, no names. The ending, as I'm sure you know, is just great, surprising, but not really when you look back at the story. He "went on his way" after that too... Um, can you please tell me how to respond to reviews? I had been going to respond to your review of my poem "How to Feel," but I've only just started uploading on fictionpress and I don't know how... I appreciate it a lot.
Kirian Pensky Lanatogue 2008-05-06 ch 1,	abuseWhat.A.Thriller.Looks like there's another R.L stine in the authoring business.lol -Vampriss2
Riding The Lightning 2008-05-04 ch 1,	abuseWhat really stands out to me is how you foreshadowed the end at several places, yet I still could not detect who/what the speaker was until the very end. It all makes sense a second time through with his focus on the veins and his coldness. The title is appropriate as well.
Fool of Amaranthine 2008-05-04 ch 1,	abuseIt was so pretty in the beginning, and then...so sad. I knew that someone was going to die, I had feeling about it, but still I was a little surprised. I wonder why you wrote this?
Princess Dargon 2008-05-04 ch 1,	abuseFirst of all, Ahh! Sad! That was not what I was expecting and I applaud you for that! Second, I feel like I must always comment on what I read so here I go... Your wording gets a little iffy and stumbling every once and a while. For the most part it is incredibly rhythmic and poetic(which is weird cause I can never get a rhythm down when reading poetry. Go figure.), but every once and a while it gets hard to follow and the reader(or just I) and almost desperate for the next period. I read it rather quickly, but that was the only thing that was really forcing me to comment. I loved how you made it so the readers didn’t really know he was the vamp until the end. Awesome and thanks for posting!

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