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| Aethra 2008-05-29 ch 1,  | abuseXD Love it XD I like the plot and every single sentence. I felt that I was consumed by your words and didn't know for a second where I was '^^. Well done! |
| AK the Twilight 2008-05-26 ch 1, | abuseAnother great example of rich imagery and plenty of tangibility in the words. I must admit, this isn't the most original of ideas, but the words and phrases are so full and beautiful, I really didn't mind. The brilliant degrees of love and imagination seem to bloom from the start, though I must say, they seem to decline a bit by the third stanza and don't reach the emotionally beautiful calibur of the beginning. Fortunately, the ending is clear and vibrant. If you can keep the imagery consistent and blooming by the end, this could be even better. This was a great poem. Nothing too original, but it didn't matter. It was excellent. |
| miscellanea 2008-05-20 ch 1, | abuseThis was sweet! Great job weaving all of those words together. My favorite-favorite line is 'I will sit and watch as the Old Tales consipire beneath your eyelids.' Personally I think that is pure genious, right there. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-05-15 ch 1, | abuseAww, that is so inspirational and just beautiful. I love how timeless it feels, really like a fairy tale. And it's full of magic and wonder, all the things a child should enjoy. I love it. Very nicely done. Keep writing! :) |
| ohthevoices 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseThis didn't seem like you trying to fight through writers' block...but then again, the things I write to that same end turn out...not very good. Anyway, I liked it, it flowed very well and the tone was very soothing. Nicely done =) |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseVery pretty =) The metaphors seem a bit much sometimes, but actually, you make it work somehow... love the last lines. Those just seem perfect. |
| FON the Conqueror 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseI nice overvview of cliche bedtime stories. I enjoyed it. Keep it up! |
| xxopticaldelusions 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseGreat, as usual. I love the imagery. Especially love: "Do you dream of dukes, of nut-cracker children with their steady teeth and ice queens in their palisades" Great job :D |
| Ramenluver 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abuseAs always, very beautiful. :) -Ramen |
| Miss Dagny Taggart 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abuseI love this! I can just imagine someone reading this while tucking in their child for bed. Keep up the great work :D |
| Dani P 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abusethis is quite good for something you came up with while you have writers block. love how you capture the feeling of a childrens story. amazing |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abusevery fairy tale-ish. Reminds me of Yeats Stolen Child. |