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| Anaeli 2008-05-18 ch 4,  | abusehey! it reminds me of the book The Pact by Jodi Picoult, they were best friends like siblengs and then when it escaladed into more than that she gets deppressed and decides to take her life... you should pick it up! anyways...(sorry that's my favorite book!);) its really good... sorry for not reviewing last chapter, internet sucks! keep writing! |
| luv me like no other 2008-05-17 ch 4, | abuseSuch a sad ending to this chappie. I do hope that you will update soon. |
| Crystal-Chaos22 2008-05-12 ch 3, | abuseSome of these characters are so perky it bothers me, lol. Anyway, I love this story so much. Emery rocks and is an awesome character. I really like the name too. This story rocks and I hope you update soon. |
| luv me like no other 2008-05-11 ch 3, | abuseI can tell that you're one for dramatic exit lines. The last lines to your chapters always get me. |
| luv me like no other 2008-05-10 ch 2, | abuseThis is kind of depressing. Poor Emery. |
| Anaeli 2008-05-07 ch 2, | abuseHey! awesome chapters so far! keep writing! and please update soon! |
| BananaFelix 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abuseI love the moral of this story, and how the character confronts what she knew all along. How trying to fool herself will never work. The only thing I can really say is I wished there was some contrast in the story. Right now it seems to have one level of sadness throughout the story. For example, if her world was crashing, but the setting or tone around her was bright, (bad example I know) I think that would pin point a struggle within herself revealing frustration or anger or a rainbow of other emotions, making the realization hit home harder for the character and in turn for the reader. Overall though, I did really like the story. |
| Kizzie Khrysler 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abuseI love it, absolutely love it. The detail, the imagery, the emotion, great. |
| luv me like no other 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abuseI like the quote that Emery repeats. |