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| rebeldork 2008-05-05 ch 1,  | abuseI have a feeling that I don't understand this. I like it, though. I like it a lot. I love the little pieces of description you have in here - their movements, the little pieces of what this scene looks like. I like the whole familiar-though-not-known concept that this girl's got, and I also like how no one has a name. It's interesting, because it reminds me so much of the story I wrote yesterday - the peacefulness, the boy and the girl, their namelessness. (Maybe it's because the stories are exactly forty words apart in length.) But I like this story, and I think the length and everything is perfect. I'll have to reread it when my brain's less dead, because I honestly can't think worth crap right now. :) |