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| The Friggin Stroke 2008-05-08 ch 2,  | abuseI love your delivery of words. And I'm not just saying it because I'm your friend. I have a suggestion...I think it'll be nice if you'd express Nancy's thoughts, whatever's going on in her head. i.e., does she have battling thoughts in her head about something; does she say what she really wants to say, u know those kinds of stuff. btw, the play they attended reminds me of tinikling and other school activities u guys joined in school together. hehe.. hope my point's clear. keep it up! |