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| Julius Gillian 2008-05-11 ch 1,  | abuseI thought this was very well planned out, very readable, and I felt like I was reading a classic, or some tale that was so enriched in someone's experience that it was simple to just fall in and embrace. The story of the dragon on the moon and this little girl was heart warming and adorable. I wonder though why the dragon couldn't figure out that the gems were weighing down the moon in the first place, but if that was intentional it does smack of humor. This story again, is incredibly well written. I felt though it could've been longer, but then again it did read (somewhat) like a biblical story 'forty days and forty nights' and those were always succinct. Overall I think you've got something here, please keep this for yourself and keep writing! |
| ham337dd 2008-05-06 ch 1, | abuseNice fable. |