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| Kiwi-kiwi6 2008-05-07 ch 1,  | abusePowerful and very similar to some poems I've written in my past. |
| kitty003 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abusehm...this is good. i like it. its short but its still got meaning to it. X3 |
| In the Rye 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseit was too cliche if you ask me. but in the third stanza, "now i'm falling/ to my death/ as i take/ my (one) last breath" the one seems to fit your rhythm better than just "my last breath". |