man its like he can never catch a break.

OMG! i LOVE LOVE LOVE this story!

i can't wait till you update again!

please update as soon as possible!

-Booklover

Wow...suspense. Can't wait for the next chapter.

oh wow thanks for replying in chapter 5 ]

i still feel so bad for gabriel.

but the dream mate does make everything a little better.

im really happy that you updated so quickly

because usually writers take forever. months even.

but yeahh this is definitely one of my favorites right now.

oh, that's so sad :( but still I like your story and I really hope that things will get better, poor gabriel!

Evil cliffie! WHat happens next? Does Gabriel die?

Oh, poor boy. I really hope the King and all like him get what they deserve. Such evil people.

There were a few spelling and grammar problems (which is very common, my own writing, for example, shows wonderful examples of bad spelling and grammar). :) But the story itself is wonderful, painful, but wonderful.

meta

Hmm, he finally drank the vial. Bet you five quid he doesn't die. Come on, I just know I'm gonna win this bet. Unless you're a cruel author :P Loved the chapter, can't wait for the demons to arrive

Hmm, much as I like it, I think that Gabriel's being annoyingly hesitant in just taking the vial. I wouldn't want to end my own life either, but in those circumstances... However, can't wait for an update

You write beautifully. I'm ashamed to see so few people have reviewed this.

I'll be checking back regularly on this story :)

Peace out.

:] hello.

im very much enjoying reading this.

its definitely something i want to continue reading

please update soon :]]

oh and makee gabriel happy soon? :]

i hopee at leastt!

lovee,

jenna.

Great chapter, establishes and details the characterizations of Lothar and Gabriel quite nicely. The flow of your writing is as smooth as ever, though I thought you used more '...'s than were necessary.

It was nothing to keep me from reading, just a bit distracting, is all.

Much love and keep writing,

Bleep

You are one of the few fantasy writers on this site that knows the balance between enough description and too much description. For that alone I applaud you.

As for the story itself, you've hooked me right in. Can't wait to see where you go with it, and if you keep updating at the rate you are, well... Christmas will have come early for me. :D

Much love and keep writing,

Bleep

(Oh, and, you might want to enable Anonymous Reviews - it makes it easier for all the lazy readers out there.)

It's good, I'd like you to update (though holding a story hostage for reviews isn't really necessary, I know how you feel about a lack of response).

Interesting story!