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| ohthevoices 2008-07-14 ch 1, | abuseDid you mean to repeat the first line, or was it just the FP formatting? (Gosh, that's so annoying.) If it was intentional, I didn't really like it; it felt repetitive. I did like the rhythm to this, though. It was nice. |
| kloun doll 2008-06-12 ch 1, | abuseit's kinda romantic, it seems you fell for a girl and you see her like a goddess, I guess. |
| ScarletDreamer 2008-05-18 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. I loved the imagery. |
| NotABanana 2008-05-07 ch 1, | abuseOh, I like this one a lot. The metaphors are great; very original. Your work is unique, and that's not something you see that often. I like how you took the emotion of love and made it something that people haven't seen before. Nice job. *high five* I'd love it if you would check out more of my writing - I would like to see what you think. |
| alittlebitconfused 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseNice poem, I liked it. I really got the feeling that you were drowning at the beginning, and your imagery helped carry that through as the poem went along. I liked that it ends on a happy note, though, it gives it a finished sense. The breaking up of your lines also helped it flow. Great :) |
| SuperTurtle 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abusei like it. It's deep but has a point to it that's what makes them good. I hope you keep writing |