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| dragonflydreamer 2008-07-17 ch 1,  | abuseThe Roadhouse is running out of beer! Follow the link in my profile to help save it (and spread reviews all around fp!) This has a nice rhythm to it. Certain lines such as "Lightening scars the skies" and "The rain pounds down" feel strong, like their words, and others flow smoothly. It is very reminiscent of a storm. I'd reccomend some punctuation just to clear up some sentences, though. Nice job :) |
| McKinley Cooper 2008-05-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh, sweetie, It put me in a trance. And I have a poem with similar weather, but none of the passion--perhaps we could co-write a complete poem--what do you say? I'll send it for you to think over ASAP. McKinley |