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| Faith Adeline 2008-05-15 ch 7, | abuseExcellent chapter, I really liked it. Keep it up and update soon! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-05-13 ch 6, | abuseha, nice. That would be my luck, only I would accidentally blurt out, "Holy **!" haha. Good job! Keep it up and update soon :) Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-05-12 ch 5, | abuseHmm, this is good, but I'm trying to think if it's realistic. First of all, no young cop will be put undercover right away, so I'd maybe pace it a few years. Plus, police tend to keep people off of cases where they're related to someone who was the victim or attacker because of just. . .biased issues. So. . .I guess the explantion is good, but I don't know if it would really happen. Je ne sais pas. Still good though. Keep it up and update soon. Faith |
| Cory D Hart 2008-05-12 ch 5, | abuseGreat start! |
| Emilyne Willowar 2008-05-10 ch 2, | abuse“I think you can start by donating me some blood. I seem to have misplaced mine.” Haha. Loved that line. ;) I loved how casually you just let it slip that Phillip is her brother, instead of just making this huge thing about it. |
| Faith Adeline 2008-05-10 ch 4, | abuseAh, good chapter, I liked it :) Well written in my opinion, content wise. Keep it up and update soon! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-05-09 ch 3, | abusehah, good ending. I liked the chapter, it was good :) Well written. Keep it up and update soon! Faith |
| Faith Adeline 2008-05-07 ch 2, | abusegood chapter. I liked it. Keep it up and update soon. Faith |
| Emilyne Willowar 2008-05-06 ch 1, | abuseOh, man, that would be a sucky day, wouldn't it? Getting stabbed definitely isn't on my list of things to do. ;) Anyway, I thought you did a great job reeling the reader in, and I hope you update this soon! |
| Faith Adeline 2008-05-06 ch 1, | abusegood, although I'm fairly certain they would've checked for weapons. That's like, the first thing you do. So I would have him place it in a more secret. . .place lol. this has potential. Keep it up and update soon :) Faith |