That's good, Bluey. It's Amber, by the way.

Aww... =( I'm sorry...

This sounds pretty much like me last night. Huzzah for poetry, well done. I especially liked the 'It hurts.' all scattered throughout.

love,
dark-hearted rose

Not bad. Probally a vocal poem more than a written one but still quite moving on paper. One suggestion, use commas. They make reading easier. Place it would of been helpful after hurt in the last stanza.

Any place you would take a pause for dramtic effect, use a comma!

Hope this was helpful. SMILEY