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michelle 2008-07-01 ch 2, anon.	abusehey darling, i like this story. seems real interesting n i like to see where it goes. pls update! (:
cue.dramatic.gasp. 2008-06-23 ch 2,	abuseI really liked it. It seemed a bit cliched, but hey, I LOVE CLICHES. So keep going with it (:
runningXwithXtheXwerewolves 2008-06-18 ch 2,	abuseha, great chapter but the begining was a bit slow...keep up the great work and UPDATE SOON!:P
Beyond-the-Shadows 2008-06-18 ch 2,	abusei liked it!
Mikari Maki Chen 2008-06-09 ch 2,	abusethat was really good! i enjoyed it ^^ you have lots of good description and such.. nice job! i want more chapters! xD
PrincessNancy 2008-06-07 ch 2,	abuseI like this story! It's awesome! :D Haha I pulled the 'You know who' thingy in my fic too! OMG. You watch bones too? I luff that show! The season finale was ... touching. I want Zach back though. :P Please update soon. Ava and Adrian seem to be fun! Nancy.
Melisa Massacre 2008-06-05 ch 2,	abusePlease update soon! I would love to see where Adrian and Ava go..
gccdlc 2008-05-28 ch 2, anon.	abuse"I liked jewellery like that – I even had a beaded brown one as a good luck charm." --i actually found a mistake o.o whoa...anyway, yea, it's jewelry... oh, and i was wondering why you use so many references in your story. i mean, it's cute and funny sometimes, but then i'm like, 'ugh, just get on with the story!' your writing is great, but i really think that all the references to random stuff is unnecessary sometimes and just slows down the story. i get why ava relates things to star wars since she's obviously a fanatic, but those aren't the only references she makes... anyway, i love how all of your characters are individuals and not carbon copies of one another...waiting for next chp.! ~german chocolate-chocolate double layer cake (yummy!) p.s. i watched bones! faking booth's death was cruel and unusual punishment!! and how could they make zacky a bad guy? -sniffle- ugh now we have to wait til next fall for season 4...
SillyOme 2008-05-22 ch 2,	abuseas always, brilliant, btw i added u on msn, mine is . looking forward to talking to you soon ;]]
katie valentine 2008-05-22 ch 2,	abuseomg louisa, im loving this story! it rocks! its damn interesting and fun too. :D update ASAP!!
Festina Lente 2008-05-21 ch 2,	abuseOh man ... I absolutely love Ava and Mr. Solo! They are just too adorable together. Seriously, I laughed a few times during their encounters. You've really hooked me on this one; can't wait for more!!
s-pecial-lee me 2008-05-18 ch 2,	abuseaww love it. haha totally get what you mean about americans in asian countries. these dude came up to me and were like can you eat gum here? this was in singapore by the way. i was like nuh duh.
butterfly-kiss 262 2008-05-17 ch 2,	abuseI love this story so far. All of your stories make me laugh. Update soon PLEASE!
Alenor 2008-05-16 ch 2,	abusehmm...interesting. i like it so far :-)
imaginary loon 2008-05-15 ch 2,	abuseSo I was a big fan of your other story, They Call it a Cliche. It was a fun and refreshing read, and it did make me chuckle. Also, it's nice to see a writer have other stories besides their big hit, so to see what else they have to offer... and that's where the problem lies, for this story. Don't get me wrong, this story's good. It's funny, and you have a nice way of describing your guy characters. But the thing is, it feels like I've read this before. It's like reading TCC all over again, with just rehashed character names, settings, etc. I feel like I've read these characters before, they way they think and act, I've read these personalities already, etc from your other story - and it just feels like you're reusing them. It's like the same old thing with different names and a different title. Your humor, while awesome in TCC, is getting slightly repetitive. It's still great though, don't worry! But I noticed, you see, that your humor is based on the ramblings/inner workings of your character's minds. Your characters ramble on and have insane thoughts - there's nothing wrong with that, that's your style of humor in your writing, but it's starting to be a bit repetitive since that's exactly how Reese was funny in TCC. Don't think this is a flame, please, your writing is good. That's why you've got a ton of reviewers etc to prove that fact. It's just that maybe you should try to bring something new to the table, show us what else you can do, and move on from this stage of your writing - because we're all pretty used to it already. Good luck!

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