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| Freedom To The Ants 2008-05-10 ch 1,  | abuseReading this story brought a smile to my face :D There were a few grammar errors (what story doesn't?) but other than that, this was a nice story. This sentence, though: She stood and brushed her hands off on her cute little dress that was decorated in bright flowers. I think should be like this: She stood and brushed the sand off on her cute little dress that was decorated in bright flowers. And maybe you could add an extra space in between paragraphs to make it easier on the eyes and easier to read. Thanks for sharing that story! :D |