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| AK the Twilight 2008-05-07 ch 1,  | abuseThis is an excellent song you've crafted. The chorus is rich with smooth descriptions and it's easy to find the pace of the lyrics. It's definitely worth the assumed work you've put towards it. It could've been a bit more descriptive and a bit longer, but then again, there's always room for improvement, as little as that may be. Find a way to fix these minor issues and this could be even better. But as it is, it's a mervelous song that would well work better with a strong melody. Excellent job with this. |