Really really good. Its like emotion put into words and slapped down on a computer !

Hi, Lara! It's Mrs. Bjork - finally. I am so sorry I didn't get to this sooner! Not only is it enjoyable to read your writing, but it's such a great opportunity for me to get to know you better!!

Your strength of character really comes out in this piece. The tone beautifully highlights the message - your short and direct presentation - curt phrases, simple diction - the format of the stanzas - all highlight and enhance the theme of the poem! It has such a strong voice!

I really like the format of this poem.

The simple "no" to getting stronger throughout.

I felt like the "somebody had to" line felt out of place. It seemed less personal that way.

Very nice poem. Sorry - no anecdotes.. do you get a lot of those? That made me smile when I read that.

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I love how your words, in a sense, fall down. It gives me the idea that the narrator starts out saying "no" in a quiet manner but grows stronger throughout until he/she finally says "Not anymore."
GREAT work.

Hm...simplistic, but forceful. Your poetry does tend to be a bit of a departure from your stories, but it does make a serious impact. The words are simplistic, but deliver serious and sincere feelings, something I kind of wasn't expecting from your story-lines of your other works.

Regardless, this poem is slightly simple, so it doesn't seem like your absolute best. This was a good poem. Simple with plenty of serious impact, but it did make me want to read some of your stories. It's okay, because I liked this. Good job!