What!? Why has this not been updated ever? "brackish pools of it glistening in the flashing red and blue light" that, and "Flash cameras captured the scene, washing everything with a ghoulish white, momentarily bleaching the dirty gray brick walls and illuminating the grime and filth of the alley" that and "Gravel was imbedded in the underside of the arms as if the victim had tried to crawl away" that were all fantastic images. Absolutely disgusting, but fantastic.

I was pretty taken aback by your scene changes. You lulled me into a false sense of security with his love for his son and then...BAM. MURDER. MURDER. Really excellently done. There were a small number of typos and spelling mistakes, but really, that's all.

The only shame is that you haven't continued this :(. I'll alert it anyway.

Wow - this is awesome!

Good use of the quote at the start, and a generally excellent story...can't wait to see what happens next!

Wow, a very well written story and you use Shakespeare in your title. Very good. I like this story very much and I hope you keep writing.