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| Bleeding White Lily 2008-05-12 ch 2,  | abuseThorn...sounds like a snake persons name. But then, rose person too. Sweetness. ;) Ah! the name Karl! It's German...my step dads name is Carl...-shudders- lol My favorite German name is Jens...I think I'll use that sometime. Aw, he's afraid of getting rape. And here I thought only girls worried about that. lol. Nice chapter. Much love! XD |
| Bleeding White Lily 2008-05-08 ch 1, | abuseWhat's Romanian? A roman story? =/ Are you ever going to do a yaoi on this site? (curious) Anyway, this is good, update it soon! ;) |
| An Inside Joke 2008-05-08 ch 1, | abuseYou needed to get detailed with personalities beyond physical descriptions, so the charecters come alive for the reader and also so we can feel more of an emotional attachment to them. The door locking doesn't pack any emotional punch for me, because I don't know how these people feel about one another, why any of them want the appartment, what the stakes are, or anythign else. |