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| IggyBork 2008-05-08 ch 1,  | abuseOh, excellent. Very lovely concept, wonderful development and conclusion. The title is slightly off, since it's less symbiosis involves consent of some kind, and she seems more dependent on the "you." Of course, it's also my interpretation, since the speaker doesn't seem to like the fact that she's the way she is, but again, opinion. One thing you may want to work on is getting rid of unnecessary words, which sort of water down the excellent images you've got going here, but for the most part I love it. |