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| TuneOut 2008-05-08 ch 1,  | abuseI liked the premise of the story. It was cute. I like the characters especially Jack since he seems charming. I don't know if I'm willing to suspend my belief that high school reunions are masquerades though. I haven't had one yet so I may be wrong, but I always just thought of them as a relaxed party where people just catch up with their lives. Also, I think 10 years is a little far fetched to still have a crush on someone. Just my opinion but I think it would have been more believable if they were reminiscing and he mentioned that he had liked her. |
| Mexicano27 2008-05-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseMj, even though you outlined the entire plot to me a day before I read this, I still greatly enjoyed reading it. I guess it would be like the difference between being told about a beautiful painting and actually seeing it for yourself. XD The characters seem to be well thought-out, and even though this story is incredibly short, you can see the defining traits and characteristics that shape them. Jack's motives for teasing are realistic, as is the the protaganist's willing to forgive him when everything is found out at the conclusion. Overall, this was a very good fic. :) |