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| A Flaming Moon 2008-05-09 ch 1,  | abuseThis seems like a really good story. Very original. Hey, one thing (I do it all the time, so don't feel bad), when you said "The king Charles Market Sora, the queen Labella Veida Sora, and their only daughter Alexandria Mizuki Sora.", it was an incomplete thought, and it confused me a little bit. But other than that one little thing I thought it was really really good! Keep it up! Can't wait for the next chapter! |