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| nicnac100 2008-06-18 ch 8,  | abuseI like how the story is progressing. Nice job. |
| kmezan 2008-06-18 ch 1, | abuseI really like this story so far, and I want to see where it goes. It seems cool, and the main character reminds me of a good friend of mine. -Katie |
| CreativeChick233 2008-06-18 ch 8, | abusewell if updating is truly the problem you can just have your own dates and everything so if you dont update for like a month or something you want have to catch up w/ EVERYTHING. But that's about it. I love where you're story is going..but i wonder y Jason is avoiding her..hmm..tough one! ha or maybe im wrong? well hope to see a email in my inbox VERY SOON! |
| princesslady 2008-06-11 ch 7, | abuseLovely! I simply love this |
| groovacious 2008-06-07 ch 1, | abuseYour story might be promising but it's real turn off that your summary is full of msn slang so please change it. Ok I'm off to read it. |
| CreativeChick233 2008-06-07 ch 7, | abusewell we have another new character. yippey! well im sorry but how old is jason?..or was that already mention..and uhm how old is marcos?tyrell..?...yeah youre probably wondering..have you read this story AT ALL?..well i have just sort of forget sometimes..lol..well hope to hear a review soon! tootles |
| I'll break your heart 2008-06-05 ch 6, | abuseI liked this chapter. Is she going to end up with Jason? That'd be so cool. Anyway great chapter. :) |
| CreativeChick233 2008-06-05 ch 6, | abuseHmm..its okay i guess, at least its longer right? Oh and she is having a romantic thing with jason? oo lala update soon? |
| lacap 2008-06-04 ch 1, | abuseThis is quite realistic. XD |
| CreativeChick233 2008-06-04 ch 5, | abuseWell these chapters could be a bit longer too! Write more |
| donsilvercat3 2008-06-04 ch 5, | abuseSorry I have not been keeping up with your story. It seems interesting and well written..I will have to start at the beginning and read it through. 9 reviews! you are getting a nice following. I will read all the reviews also.. enjoy your summer vacation. |
| nicnac100 2008-05-18 ch 3, | abuseI like the story. I little confused about her age. Has her age change in the diary or is still fourteen. maybe you give the diary some dates. I not sure I like the fact she call her self the fat girl at the end of the diary. I know her esteem may be low, but I think she sign her name. Fat girl is the way she maybe percieved by peers in general and how she percieve herself as but that should not define her. she need to sign her name at the end of diary. |
| I'll break your heart 2008-05-17 ch 2, | abuseI like your story not many people choose to write from this angle so it's interesting to read. I enjoyed it can't wait till the next update. :) |
| donsilvercat3 2008-05-15 ch 3, | abusevery good. Realistic. one correction "had went" is an awkward construction.. "had gone" is better but often diaries are not grammatically perfect. |
| CreativeChick233 2008-05-14 ch 3, | abuseupdate soon! now we are at the romance part woohoo!! -i hope you get more reviews- |