Reviews for The forgotten - FictionPress.com

lorientmnt 2008-06-06 ch 2,	abuseGreat chapter! I can't wait for more.
Adam Jason 2008-05-09 ch 1,	abuseOkay so far so good! everybody starts somewhere, there are a couple grammar issues that I wish to address. In the spot where you say, "before the king in the Grand palace where awaited them their doom" I was really confused, so i fixed it, "before the king where they awaited their doom." I dont know somethimes this happens to me as well when im typing i totally tend to forget whole words because you have ideas coming out of you so fast. Writing can be jumbling just keep trying and read over your story before submitting.
phantom66 2008-05-09 ch 1,	abusewow! if this is the first chapter the rest must be even better! auwsome work phantom66
lorientmnt 2008-05-09 ch 1,	abuseI really like your idea here. Keep up the good work--I can't wait for more!