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| Hoodwynk 2008-06-19 ch 1,  | abusePretty; fertile snow was a phrase that I loved |
| Hoodwynk 2008-06-19 ch 9, | abuseI always feel awkward reviewing a haiku because the words themsleves are flexible; as is the reader's perception. I'm not sure that I understand the connection between dirt and doors, though there are many possible ones... Besides any of this, It is a very good haiku and gives the existance bit a very new twist |
| Phantisaeii 2008-06-07 ch 1, | abuseThis is probably my favorite out of your collection. I admire your haikus. |
| Jesusfreak43091 2008-06-07 ch 9, | abusethis ones pretty col i like the word choice except for when you say "barren". to me i think "empty" would fit better, just my opinion tho but otherwise it paints a clear picture =] good job! |
| Untitled and Unfinished 2008-06-06 ch 1, | abusevery good! I really enjoyed this. I think that it's sad, but reflexs alot. I appreciated it! God job! |
| simpleplan13 2008-06-01 ch 7, | abuseI like the last line because it seems very contradictory. Well done. |
| Mahone-chic-89 2008-06-01 ch 1, | abuseinteresting...creepy in a sense with the whole blood mention, but still very visual and unique. Good work!! ~L |
| America's Rockstar 2008-05-27 ch 6, | abuseI loved it! The last chapter was the best because it made me feel sort of crushed. Everything was amazing, and so true...it got me to have another view on Life, Childhood, ect. Maybe you should not divide it into so much chapters or add a little more to the chapters... |
| Baticul 2008-05-24 ch 6, | abuseAmen. I understand completely. |
| Baticul 2008-05-24 ch 3, | abuseSimple, powerful. I like it. |
| Flaran 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseThis is my favorite of this collection. It has blunt imagery (which I think you used well) and an air of mystery. Flaran |
| Miser Meaku 2008-05-09 ch 1, | abuseThis is thought provoking. Better than most which provide meaning immediately. I like the contrast of fertile and snow. Good job. |