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Hoodwynk 2008-06-19 . chapter 1
Pretty; fertile snow was a phrase that I loved
Hoodwynk 2008-06-19 . chapter 9
I always feel awkward reviewing a haiku because the words themsleves are flexible; as is the reader's perception. I'm not sure that I understand the connection between dirt and doors, though there are many possible ones... Besides any of this, It is a very good haiku and gives the existance bit a very new twist
Phantisaeii 2008-06-07 . chapter 1
This is probably my favorite out of your collection.

I admire your haikus.
Jesusfreak43091 2008-06-07 . chapter 9
this ones pretty col

i like the word choice except for when you say "barren". to me i think "empty" would fit better, just my opinion tho

but otherwise it paints a clear picture =] good job!
Untitled and Unfinished 2008-06-06 . chapter 1
very good! I really enjoyed this. I think that it's sad, but reflexs alot. I appreciated it! God job!
simpleplan13 2008-06-01 . chapter 7
I like the last line because it seems very contradictory. Well done.
Mahone-chic-89 2008-06-01 . chapter 1
interesting...creepy in a sense with the whole blood mention, but still very visual and unique. Good work!!

~L
dorkiee 2008-05-27 . chapter 6
I loved it! The last chapter was the best because it made me feel sort of crushed. Everything was amazing, and so true...it got me to have another view on Life, Childhood, ect.
Maybe you should not divide it into so much chapters or add a little more to the chapters...
Baticul 2008-05-24 . chapter 6
Amen. I understand completely.
Baticul 2008-05-24 . chapter 3
Simple, powerful. I like it.
A Once Dead Poet 2008-05-14 . chapter 1
This is my favorite of this collection. It has blunt imagery (which I think you used well) and an air of mystery.

Flaran
Miser Meaku 2008-05-09 . chapter 1
This is thought provoking. Better than most which provide meaning immediately. I like the contrast of fertile and snow. Good job.
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