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| Dahlia Black 2008-05-31 ch 1,  | abuseWell said. Keep up the good work! |
| Scarlett Wynter 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abuse"believing in a lie is just another truth"...wow. that's a line you could just get lost in thought about for hours. nice work. |
| wolves and roses 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abusethats really nice, i love the flow and message |
| NJ Is My Home 2008-05-18 ch 1, | abusethis had great meaning to it.. |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseOoh, heartfelt and sad, yet pretty. I'm guessing you & Aelfin are related in this somehow? Anyway, I loved the last verse, especially the lines: "Falling down sometimes is all it takes, To see the inner light." Lovely. Moon's Poetess |
| wildcard07 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseA pessimistic view of life...like the thought. Try working on the flow, though...^^ |
| AK the Twilight 2008-05-13 ch 1, | abuseOf the lot of your poems, this one is extremely beautiful compared. The last stanza surpasses the others without a doubt. The second one, though, feels rather cliche. If you could use some of the strong language seen in the first and definitely the last, the poem could tie together better. Good job, though. |
| fallenflame13 2008-05-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is a really beautiful poem. The rhythm worked out well. Good job. I really enjoyed it. |
| Aelfin 2008-05-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is written so simply and yet it has such strong feelings. Its like all i've ever tried to say in anything i've ever written, perfected into 12 lines of perfection =] Aelfi x |
| Wolf Wonderer 2008-05-10 ch 1, | abuseOh my gosh, I love that last stanza. The wording really got me. |
| TheRealWorldIsCounterfeit 2008-05-10 ch 1, | abusevery nice. its rather dark though. the ending stanza's my favorite. i like the random rhyming too. Assuming your peom is about life, it signifies that life is rather random sometimes. |