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| Hippielover459 2008-05-09 ch 1,  | abuseAw, this was amazing and totally true to teenage life. |
| asylum writer 2008-05-09 ch 1, | abuseA little cliched, maybe, but cute and still pretty good. The Broadway thing seemed kind of thrown in there at the end. It would've been cool if she'd had a love of singing throughout the story or something. If Justin's 7 in 1995, how can they graduate in 2008? He'd be 20 by then... Just a little constructive criticism, but other than that, I liked it. |
| Katie Saychiadu 2008-05-09 ch 1, | abuseHi! Interesting story... I feel like a lot of information was containted in this chapter, but I'm assuming that you did it that way on purpose. Your writing is very nice and I like your section breaks. The only piece of advice I would offer is to recalculate your timeline. It doesn't add up properly is Justin was 7 when they met. Other than that, I like it a lot and I hope you continue. |