Grammar mistakes
At medium height, she was neither to small nor to big for the boy- should be too instead of to

...an angel would have never made that the countless mistake made by him.- um... maybe you could change this to never made the countless mistakes made by him.

but over all good.

omg! what what this mysterious accident of his? when was this, after the second or before? will his wish be granted? update soon please

That. Was. A. Maz. Ing. This story is so incredibly unique. Like, to find out that he's mute? Oh my gosh. Amazing. Clever. I love you and your descriptiveness. I'm already in love with this story, and I really want to know how it progresses. One mistake, though:

"all of these inquiries popped into his head, But he had no way to convey these questions"
Yeah, the capital B. Everything else was great. This story is like a breath of fresh air, it's heavenly (get it? Heaven, angel. Yeah) Anyways, update soon! Whether you get your 20 reviews or not, I can't wait for the next chapter to come out.

wings, different. well different is good... it sounds kinda like maximum ride with the wings... hum... maybe i should force you to read them

Wow. An angel, how beautiful. Once again, beautiful descriptions. This story sounds like...a painting. I don't know if that makes sense, but I feel like I'm looking at a piece of art. You have an extremely talented way with words. Okay, I'm done drooling.
First/Second of all, I'm quite flattered that I inspired you to continue this story. When I saw it in the archives I was shocked because I didn't think you'd update so fast. Thank you. I hope you update the next chapter as fast as you did this one :)

Great descriptions. I could actually see and hear everything that was going on. I love a descriptive story. All I have to say, is where does this girl live? There isn't a cave anywhere near where I am, lol. What are the chances of her finding one? Onto my loves:

I loved this: "Her dark blue jeans had large slits decorated them"

and this: "But her eyes, her emerald green eyes expressed fear and mistrust. Her life before she ran away proved that no one could be trusted. Not even your own blood."

and this: "Her legs crumbled to the ground and she sobbed endlessly while the bashes of thunder hide her bawling."
But I think you mean "hid" not "hide"

I have more loves, but I don't want to crowd this review too much. This story looks very promising. I hope you continue it.

if you need help your lovely friend here can give you a few ideas depending on how you want the story to go.

Very Intresting! I like it. I can't wait for the next chapter.

I'm sad now. And scared. And feel bad for the girl :(

I demand that you update soon. And if you don't, I shall see you at school *evil eyes*

You've done a really nice job of setting the tone for the story. Your word choice really helped to immerse the reader in this girl's world, and for that, I commend you.

Everything is so dark... so eerie. Granted, from the summary, the story will be dealing with serious topics, and if that's true, you've really outdone yourself in setting up a potentially very, very good story!

There were a few minor typos, but nothing a quick re-read wouldn't fix :-)

Keep it up, this looks like it could be good!

Love,
Sammy