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suffering opheliac
2008-06-26
ch 1,
abuseE, I love this one. I feel like this all the time when I'm about to see a certain someone (even though it was usually before third hour ;]).

Thank you; I'm smiling. :)
maximusrexmundi
2008-05-19
ch 1,
abuse:) cool! I love it when things work out that way.
East-0f-Eden
2008-05-18
ch 1,
abusethat was very descriptive of music.
Ryan J. Dailey
2008-05-13
ch 1,
abuseGreat piece. Reminds me of a letter I wrote in high school. I wrote a poem about it when she turned me down, it was called on the longest day of my life.

Keep writing, every letter is practice for your masterpiece.

Z
Getuie
2008-05-10
ch 1,
abuseI liked the description you put in here that just all reflect that sense of anxiety and nervousness. The line 'my feet made my body walk away' has to be my favourite as it just captured that entire sense of uncertainty/unwillingness/nervousness and more. The shift into warmth and sweetness conveyed mostly in the last verse was also nicely done. I think the only 'critique' I could give was changing the & to an actual 'and' because that was kind of distracting.
kloun doll
2008-05-10
ch 1,
abusewow, it's sweet I thought about love instead of friendship.
Jennifer
2008-05-10
ch 1,
abuseI'm glad that she's happy? You seem really happy in the poem.
sweets555
2008-05-10
ch 1,
abuseHmm. I'm assuming you made up with her? Or am I totally wrong?


Great poem either way
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