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| Imalefty 2008-05-25 ch 1,  | abusestraight from the review marathon! (link in profile) i like how you use the ten paces... it really builds up the tension. i wanted a bit more of the duelist's inner thoughts... it would have been nice to see what he was thinking. "suveneers" - i think it should be "souvenirs." did he actually get shot? i was a bit confused by that... it seemed like it was all just a game. keep writing! -Lefty |
| XCgirl 2008-05-25 ch 1, | abuseWow, you really built a lot of tension! Great conclusion, too! Great job! |
| ArcticBanana 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseThat was pretty good. |