Realistic enough to be true, methinks. I rather like your sentence structures (even the fragments). What brought this about?

Interesting. I like the imagery in the first two lines.

I love the last two lines. Those we were really powerful, interesting and true. I liked the format, though a lot your "sentences" aren't really sentences. Also, I'm curious did you mean to do some as -- and some as one long one (I dunno how to make that happen) 'cause that seemed a bit odd to me. Still, a really great piece. Nice job!

Okay...reciprocate. I gave you a little info about one of my poems. Tell me a little about this one. Was it an epiphany, an observation, or just some thoughts that ran together in your head?

McKinley

I like the quick hitting realizations in this. Flash emotions come across so well. Well done. MD:77.

This poem flows well; its simplistic and very clear yet then again its draped with a slight elegance that I really like. Basically, its graceful without being too much; really nice! great job, keep up the good work!