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Twilight Starr 2008-08-06 ch 1,	abuseThe "watermelons for a chest" part was funny. "Child-less" can be spelled "childless". The ring part and the ice cream part was very cute in expressing how much she liked him. I like how she confronted him and tried to move on. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~
stunninglyaverage 2008-07-20 ch 1,	abuseYou go girl! Yep, I always wished I had the balls to do something like this. Sadly however, I am a girl.
d666lisa 2008-05-17 ch 1,	abuseExcellent story, very well written and (in my opinion)very true to life :)
SparklingStar25 2008-05-12 ch 1,	abuselove it
duckliy543 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abusegod why did she give him her number! she shoulda just left him in the dust. gr. but i loved this no matter how it ended, it was well written and thouhgt out. i just didnt get the part where it was like call me if you ever want to just...talk. what else are they gonna do? have phone sex? just sayingg. i wish it had more ephasis, like more movement, like her watching him while he says it, and a little more dialouge between the pair. but great job!
Incurable Dreamer 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseYou can't imagine how much I can relate to this story. And like another reviewer said, this isn't your typical story. She's not one of those wimpy female characters that needs the guy to sweep her off her feet. She stood strong, and I really admire her for that. Thank you very much for writing this! =)
White Rose Blossom 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseAw...bittersweet :) Great job! -Aria
Lily Llynn 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseI love this. This isn't the typical (unrequited) confession story, she's strong, she's not a baby, and she's not running away. (: I like it. I like how she realized that her happiness is not hinged on someone else's, and how she deals with it. I just really like the character of Amy. (: Fantastic writing and plot. Kudos to found.eventually for adding this to our c2. (:
fortuneismymuse 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseSince I'm guessing telling Jack all of this is out of character for Amy, it seems very weird that she's still a bit passive as she's telling Jack all of this... if that doesn't make sense, here's what confused me: I opened my eyes and stared him down. “But you see, Jack. I had already accepted the fact that I had a crush on you. That maybe, little by little, it was slowly growing into something more. I knew you didn’t feel that way, that your feelings were purely platonic. But I still couldn’t help myself. I fell in love with you. Cliché, huh?” I let out a little laugh. “Even now, you don’t see how much I resent all your girlfriends. How jealous I get. But I deal with it. I dealt with it because I wanted you to be happy, Jack. But then I realised something.” I cocked my head to the side and gave him my half smile. At first she's staring him down and then the last line that I've inserted seems kind of... wishy washy. Half smile? It's really nice but it seems very awkward... the speech seems like something... written. It seems more formatted to be a letter without any interruptions, I guess. I think also maybe it would be better to add more emotion to it? The half smiles and little laughs seem out of place without it. Other than that, it's a really nice plot and it's written well. :)
x3life 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abusethis was really good.. but i totally wanted him to say more.. or have more of a reaction like answer her Q of why he never did like her or something..
found.eventually 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseThis is... Different. And I like (most) different things. Though really, I didn't like jack. He's just too daft for my liking. And slightly insensitive. And retarded. And just.. Well, you get my point. Loved the MC's voice, though. It was vulnerable, yet strong at the same time. I admire the way she handled it, really. :) All in all, a wonderful one-shot! Well done, love!
dimethylmercury 2008-05-11 ch 1,	abuseI liked the sort of 'grey' feeling/mood throughout the piece. Though you didn't describe the weather, there was that feeling there, which I thought was good(: The 'How could that be possible?’/'how it couldn’t be possible.” was a nice play on words.(: I thought this was quite nicely done and all the ends tied up well... But the romantic in me just can't get over the fact that there isn't the last part where he catches her hand as she walks away and confesses that he loves her too(:
ABC 2008-05-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseI like how she didn't end up with him 'cause mostly all of the one-shots i've read,the girl usually ends up with the guy. So,it was nice for a change even if it was sad..
kaitoveslovesbabyxx 2008-05-11 ch 1, anon.	abusenice one you got here. best friend love. xx

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