I'm too tired and full of chocolate right now to think of an interesting character from the Name Game so Angiz will have to do (anyway, haven't you always wanted an apricot to review your story?)Wow I had forgotten until I read this again what a stupid idiot Sandy is! And I think Rhea totally did eat Alfred's pickle and was just trying to cover it up by lying...

I can't wait for the competition to start! What was with that freaky dream? Was it a premonition?

Aloha, I am Mr. Gobbs- Cheesemaker Extraordinaire! I very much enjoyed reading your story, but I must admit I was rather disappointed at the absence of any reference to cheese. Rhea got excited over cookies? What poppycock! Cheese is the greatest food in the universe! Unless they were cheese cookies? That would have been acceptable... oh wait, I see now that they were, in fact, chocolate chip. This is an outrage!

-Mr. Gobbs

Right, now that he's had his say... brilliant chapter! I, for one, have absolutely no problem with the lack of cheese in this chapter- actually, hang on, I've just had a thought... You're always going on about how cheesy this story is so maybe it is full of cheese after all :P I liked the depressing spin on the typical girly sleepover, but poor Allie :(

Shilzi... SHILZI!
Yes, that was my lame attempt at translating her creepy speech into text :P That's right, Jonzin's wife is now reading too- they both adore your story and want more, and they are willing to go to any lengths to get an update (cough*torture*cough) so you had better post the next chapter soon or you will be sorry...

Greetings, 'tis I, Jonzin, the creepy puppet-come-to-life... Haha yes I have decided that since I'm too lazy to make an account I am going to keep using names from the Name Game (c) whenever I review. Great chapter! Rhea- oops! I mean Rhapsody-Anne (I will never understand how you came up with that name) is still my favourite character (well, apart from Griggins, that is!) I really can't explain to you how addictive this story is in a soap-opera kind of way. You should keep posting seeing as you've got like fifty chapters written already! Keep it up, schmuck!

Ps Griggins is so cool(and you should always remember the origins of his name :P)

Pps Jonzin just reviewed your story and if you don't update soon, he will come for you... mwahahaha! Now if that isn't incentive to post another chapter, I don't know what is!

I'm sure you already know who this is from the name, and if you don't... well then I'm going to send Rob Shegonk to murde... er, I mean.. throw you a party... yeah... :P Anyway I am so glad you've put this online- now I can send you threatening reviews forcing you to continue it as well as bugging you in real life. I know I've already read it but I'm going to keep rereading until you decide to write the next chapter (or until I force you to...) WRITE NOW!

-Shnek-Brook O'Kin-Kan (Yes, this is definitely Shnek-Brook...)

omgod, that was amazing. you gotta love the snooty, stuck up ones. they provide so much comic relief. but you sure weren't nice to rhea in this one... it was entertaining, though. and of COURSE jordan would be the one to find her! it IS a soap opera, after all.

more soon?
--anne (your mental twin)

Cute update, I liked it. I already hate this Sandy character. I have to admit though, I have a little trouble distinguishing the main characters, I hope to see more development of their characters in the coming chapters!

hehe, that's amazing. i can't wait for them to knock sandy off her pedestal! they will, right? they'd better, at least!

i can take half and hour in front of the mirror to get ready. it's not that hard at all.

you're back in editing mood? yay! new chapters :D!

--anne

eep, can't believe i haven't reviewed this! anyway, here i am, nice and ready to leave you a nice and shiny review :D.

so...

loved it! allie's break down was indeed over-dramatized, but that's the kind of story it is :P. (hey, when i type that, do you see the icon from the forums like i do? lol)

rhea and the cookies were hilarious. i can see myself doing that :P.

does this count as enough of a review to get ch. 5? oh, and you should start replying to my reviews, or i'll think you aren't reading them. :(.

--your mental twin.

I love figure skating so I'm pretty excited about your story and look forward to more! (But a little more drama wouldn't hurt... ;))

there's nothing WRONG with fluff and cheese and girly nonsense, you know. and i love how you're giving each of the three their own voice. i want rhea's haircut.

allie really is a bundle of nerves, isn't she? then again, i would be too, if i were faced with regionals.

if all rhea has to deal with is her name, then she's in good shape.

is this the original text, or are you revising as you go? 'cause if it's the original, that's REALLY good for november! (not saying that it isn't really good for any other time, 'cause it is, but it's even more impressive if you wrote it this well in just NaNoWriMo time.)

if i write you a long review, will you post quickly anyway? :P

why must all rinks be ugly? -sigh- i suppose we don't notice anymore...

they're only 13?? wow... triple flip at 13. now i'm REALLY jealous :P.

griggins, coach from hell :P. we have a coach like that, and, guess what? her kids get places! funny how that works...

i love all three girls already. rhea's hilarious, and allie's issues are going to be interesting to explore. emma sounds like a person i would want to meet and be friends with. and i love the interaction between the three. it's very realistic, and it's clear that they've known each other forever.

griggins and his eyebrows are hilarious.

i hate coach favoritism! it's really blatant, too. i can imagine that would be really frustrating for the other girls.

outside edge, left leg, toe pick... triple lutz? i hate lutzes. yup, it was. lol, just realized that he said it later. but i figured it out on my own! so there!

the drama begins to unfold! how are they going to cope? how will rhea deal if she doesn't win? lol, i think i can guess that she's the most snobbish of them all.

so, does this count as long enough to merit another chapter? because your sister's right: it IS addicting :P.

--kyra aka your mental twin

ooh, this is way cool! i like it, and the corny skating jokes rock. and the whole drama over losing the triple flip is hilarious. more soon?

--kyra aka your mental twin